My ex-girlfriend, Taylor, broke up with me on Saturday, and I'm trying to win her back. I wrote this poem for her and I'd like your opinion on it before I give it to her. The essence of spring, I watched your hair glisten with the light of a dawn morning. and with the eyes made of fire you embraced cold lips with the rouge dreams. With so many pains in my heart, I drive the energy of longing to touch. Broken tears and sweating hands produce my numb self. Always crying with the depressing thoughts. Like a young and wounded coyote, I am howling for your smile. Blessed girl, female of platinum stars -- the machinery of this sadness is crumbling my heart into a mess of nothing. Thanks

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This is quite nice, rejected. It seems to be a big loss for you. I'm sorry you guys aren't bf & gf anymore...

Keep writting, it makes you strong And also, you do it very well

Cheers!

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All depends. Why did she break up with you? If it was something that you did, like something silly such as looking at another girl....on television, then I think it's quite possible. If she likes someone else, then you might have a hard time there.

Oh, and if I may add something, try to put something in the poem that will remind her of the good things that you guys did. That works. Trust me.

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ya thats a nice poem and u do seem pretty depressed with it it sort of seems like a situation im in cuz i like this girl who liked me but then a new kid came and now she likes him

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Nice Poem

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Thanks for the comments!
I don't really think I can add anything else into here, this poem came strait from my heart.


(to grandgamer: Make a move before he does; I bet she still likes you!)

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