A Spoon (or When Ambition Abandons Reason) Why do we seek A silver spoon, (which is a moon that heaven hides) And follow a ladel as our guide? When do the meek Make wax wings fly, Just to try, Our spirit's mind But in doing so --have we left the world behind? ___ What Will You See Look at the sky, what do you see? Ten thousand stars and seven moons, Yet none have noticed me. Look at the sky, what do you see? Nebula seas and astral dunes, Yet none need notice me. Look at the sky, what will you see? A new word carved in starlit runes, For that star will be me! ___ Yeah... they suck. Oh well.

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those are good! you are talented man! keep up the good work

dont spam please...post lines more than 2-3 lines longer.....

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the poems above have dense and lasting appeal...well done.marvelous teenager,did a pretty work.i applaud to you.hope you make persistent efforts,make more and more good works.good luck!

oh,just look at time of my pc. too late now,for my location is GMT+8:00,exactly is 23:00pm.i think i will sleep well by reading your poem...hehe

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what? posting poems you -claim- suck? silly poet. I was immediately smiling after seeing the first line of each poem- you clearly show a ton of talent

both poems are very cute- and it is complimentary to be able to clearly speak a poem in as little as a stanza or two- that takes a definate realization in the writer of the actual sort of well, embodiment of the poem and, not to be weird, the poem's self.

While the second poem more simply makes me smile and happy, I actually really do like the first one- it shows your skill in not simply writing with words and entitling it a poem, but metaphorically and truly poetically writing the unrealities that are the facts of the life we seem to claim to know a reality for.

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You should make a book homie, of dah poems. I like the first one alot but not the second as much. I don't know, I think I find it too kiddish or something. But it's still coo.

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i thik that are beautiful... i love it

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Here is one of my not so great poems




Run away with me lets leave all this behind,
forget our names forget forget who we are,
Just get in the car and drive.

we can dance in open fields and howl at the moon,
we can lay on our backs, eyes fixed on the stars, wondering how far and naming each one
we can look for sea shells on rocky coasts
chase the waves on sandy beaches feeling the sand between our toes
we can get lost in tall forests and play amoung the fallen leaves
feel the chill of winter as we watch the snow cling to the trees

run away with me lets leave all this behind
we wont need much
just get in the car and drive...

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lol, that's pretty good actually,

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