Angels Of Mercy

dvs

Apr 6 2005, 07:09 AM

Angels Of Mercy

From out of the sky on silver wings
They could have been princess's, Queens or Kings
Without a thought of there own despair
Concerned about the troubles of others somewhere

Knowing that soon for certain they would die
They where bound and determined to take the evil from the sky
Surrendering there souls so that others could live
There precious lives each one did give

My mind knowth not the horror before them
As they fought with evil in a heavenly realm

I'm not sure what I would do if it where me
So brave and courageous these angles had to be

Now the city ahead is safe and sound
For they have finally brought the evil down

Now with wings of angels once again they fly
Somewhere in heaven far above the sky

May God rest there souls and forever with him shall they be
These angels of mercy from flight ninety-three

choetry

Apr 6 2005, 03:06 PM

Very nice poem, but has some spelling mistakes...

QUOTE(dvs @ Apr 6 2005, 06:09 PM)

Angels Of Mercy

From out of the sky on silver wings
They could have been princess's, Queens or Kings
Without a thought of their own despair
Concerned about the troubles of others somewhere

Knowing that soon for certain they would die
They were bound and determined to take the evil from the sky
Surrendering their souls so that others could live
Their precious lives each one did give

My mind knowth not the horror before them
As they fought with evil in a heavenly realm

I'm not sure what I would do if it were me
So brave and courageous these angles had to be

Now the city ahead is safe and sound
For they have finally brought the evil down

Now with wings of angels once again they fly
Somewhere in heaven far above the sky

May God rest there souls and forever with him shall they be
These angels of mercy from flight ninety-three

And I am not sure why do you use the word 'knowth' when there are no other words in archaic form, for example:

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For they hath finally brought the evil down

And the rhyme is pretty and natural, and i love the 3rd stanza the most

choetry

Apr 6 2005, 03:15 PM

Oh, I just read the subtitle and finally understood what the 'Angels of Mercy' refer to:p

And then I read again, and realise how meaningful each line is, although the event happened long time ago.

I am not from the US and I have forgotten much of the story but I didnt know the city was saved by the flight passengers... thanks for the revision:)

Waiting

Apr 6 2005, 10:02 PM

I like it, it was good. Much better than I could ever do

NilsC

Apr 7 2005, 12:02 AM

Very nice and very poetic. I'm not a poetry critic but it took me back to 9/11 and a lot of memories.

The souls lost there in the cornfield and on the other fligts and the people inside the towers and pentagon are still remembered.

thanks for sharing.

Nils

dvs

Apr 7 2005, 03:36 AM

choetry thanks for pointing out spelling.
I wrote this poem just a few months after 9/11 I have it posted at poetry.com and I saw this forum here and thought I woould post it here.

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And I am not sure why do you use the word 'knowth'

It's like old style english may be from the 15 century becouse I read the King James ver of the Holy Bible.

choetry

Apr 7 2005, 03:39 AM

QUOTE(dvs @ Apr 7 2005, 02:36 PM)

It's like old style english may be from the 15 century becouse I read the King James ver of the Holy Bible.

Yea I know that's old style but that's the only old style word in the poem. I suppose if that's meant to be in the old style format, some of the other words should be changed to old style too

dvs

Apr 7 2005, 04:30 AM

I see your point.
I my end up changeing that.
Thanks for your insight.

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Angels Of Mercy - My poem for those who died on flight 93 9/11

Angels Of Mercy - My poem for those who died on flight 93 9/11