"I am A Worm"

Verse:
Raging war against the law of my mind
Making me a prisoner of the law of sin
My tears have fed me day and night
My heart turns to wax, it melts within
Waging war again, and again

Pre-Chorus:
What a wretched man am I
What a wretched man

Chorus:
Who will rescue me from this
Body of death
Thanks be to God
Through the Son
I am a worm and not a man
All my bones are out of joint

Verse:
When i want to do good
Evil is there with me
When i want to do good
Evil's there tempting me
My tears have fed me day and night

Pre-Chorus:
What a wretched man am I
What a wretched man

Chorus:
Who will rescue me from this
Body of death
Thanks be to God
Through the Son
I am a worm and not a man
All my bones are out of joint

My God
Why have you forsaken me?
My God
Why are you so far from saving me?

So far from the words of my groaning (X2)

Chorus (X2)
Who will rescue me from this
Body of death
Thanks be to God
Through the Son
I am a worm and not a man
All my bones are out of joint

I AM A WORM! (X4)

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Ok i know this isnt an mp3 of someone singing it but please give feedback anyway.
This song was composed by me, Esteban Ramirez, and has not yet been published
Thanks you.

 

 

 

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Is there a melody or something like that? If not, I would call it a poem...

But you don't repeat things in a poem like in songs... Like "I AM A WORM! (X4)"... But hmmm a melody should be nice... Just try to find a well-known one, or give us a midi file with the melody, or a MP3...

Nice "song" anyway

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i got the "guitar beat" for it but i just wanted people to look at the content of the song, not the rythm and such.

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I like the lyrics. Dark, depressing... they fit really good in a grunge or metal song.

Attending to your user name (lordofthesabbath) I suppose that you make metal with big riffs like Black Sabbath, donīt you?

I would like to hear the music.

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Thank you for your feedback, yah my band is a Christian Metal/Alt. Rock band and this is a Metal piece.

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It sounds very good! Or bad I should say. I can imagine the tune right now..it would sound great. The lyrics are very meaningful aswell, tell me if I'm wrong.

I'm thinking you're saying that you're having a war of trying to not sin, but you can't stop yourself. You're sad and angry with yourself, hence your "heart melting." and you want God to rescue you.

I'm sure there's more if I got more in depth with it, but I'll leave the rest of the people to try and interpret the rest

Very nice lord of the sabbath, I think your band's fans will like this.

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nice song, its alot better than anything i could write.

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Right u are rejected, it already has a kinda grunge beat. If only i had a singer, thanks for the feedback guys!

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