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Teri Luketic
post Jul 26 2006, 10:40 PM
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Wandring Heart
Oh my ever wandring heart,
You've held strong through so much pain.
Soon the bandages will start,
To fall at my feet in the rain.


Could I ever forget him?
How I long to say that I could!
But fear not you heart so dim,
For we will dance where he once stood.



Okay, so the first half is actually written by Dickinson, but the second half is all mine. At the time, we had an assignment in my junior honor's english class to pick one of her poems and either turn it into our own, or write another verse. This particular one, was added onto by three different girls, all of which said they only liked it. They also knew what was going on with me and my life at the time, and told me that I should get a good grade on it since it was completely from the heart, not just trying to be frilly or anything. I don't think it's all that good. . .it's short and doesn't hvae all that much frill. All usual words. But apparently, my teacher thought it was A+ worthy huh.gif

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post Aug 13 2006, 09:17 AM
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hey!good job! i'm a poet/rapper/story writer myself.nice to kno that there still are creative ppl in the wrld.
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post Aug 22 2006, 03:20 PM
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Yes its short but its not what you have its how you use it and this poem proves it. Those four lines show determination, strength and positivness and showing that you will survive through anything that life throws at you.

ITs really good and definately worthy of an A+ smile.gif
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post Aug 22 2006, 05:13 PM
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QUOTE(shadowx @ Aug 22 2006, 08:20 PM) *

Yes its short but its not what you have its how you use it and this poem proves it. Those four lines show determination, strength and positivness and showing that you will survive through anything that life throws at you.

ITs really good and definately worthy of an A+ smile.gif



its exxelent,brilliant WOW!!!!!!! i like that
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post Aug 22 2006, 06:25 PM
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Speaking of short poems, here is one that you might find interesting. It does convey a lot of meaning though it is only composed of three words...

Hired.
Tired?
Fired!

Here is a short poem that I wrote more than a quarter century ago when I had nothing better to do...

Lonely highway,
Going my way,
My thumb is out,
Crap! I've got the gout!
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