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> My Poem, Of Sorts, Omnipotence
Cerb
post Jul 11 2005, 06:12 PM
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This is my first attempt at poetry. It's just free verse, but I really like it.

Omnipotence

There is no you without me.
Events, people, and places only exist because I think them.
The only reason you are is because I am.
Your perspective is my perspective.
I am all and one.
Strip away the reality that I have come to believe and all that is left is me.
I was born of my own mind out of nowhere and nothing. I have evolved.
The black void of which I live in surrounds me, yet I see none of it.
All I see is what I have thought, what I think exists.
This is my world, I have created it, I have shaped it, I have added life to it.
I am God.
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post Jul 12 2005, 01:57 AM
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QUOTE(Cerb @ Jul 11 2005, 12:12 PM)
This is my first attempt at poetry. It's just free verse, but I really like it.

Omnipotence

There is no you without me.
Events, people, and places only exist because I think them.
The only reason you are is because I am.
Your perspective is my perspective.
I am all and one.
Strip away the reality that I have come to believe and all that is left is me.
I was born of my own mind out of nowhere and nothing. I have evolved.
The black void of which I live in surrounds me, yet I see none of it.
All I see is what I have thought, what I think exists.
This is my world, I have created it, I have shaped it, I have added life to it.
I am God.
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Oooh - I like it! The best part is probably the contradicting part of it. Tres bien!

Man, I tried writing something like this a while back. I ended up with about 100 pages of novel that I'm never going to do anything with ><
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Cerb
post Jul 12 2005, 05:09 AM
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Most people don't like it much because of the last line. They see it as something meant to question the existence of God. I, myself, am a christian, so that wasn't the point of it at all. It was really written just to make a person think.

I'm glad you liked it, though smile.gif. I hope you find something to do with your novel tongue.gif.
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post Jul 12 2005, 07:40 PM
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I can understand that, kind of. I'm a natural skeptic and I've spent a lot of time wondering about different religions. I want to ask so many questions to people but I'm afraid of being ignored, yelled at, or otherwise annoyed at the concept of there being falsehoods to the Bible, or the existence of numerous Gods (my religion, Hinduism, firmly believs this)

To those of you reading, PLEASE don't convert this into one of those controversial "GOD" posts. A few of us participated openly on the last one to come around, and while it was a lot of fun, this post should not invite posts about that discussion. Forget my reply now and go read Cerb's poem. It's really quite good.
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post Aug 10 2005, 08:02 AM
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Cerb, I especially liked the line about the only reason you are is because I am. Might be even better capitalizing the word "am" biggrin.gif

And BR, while I stand against the idea that there are any falsehoods in the Bible, I'm simply making it known here, if you don't want to talk about it, we won't.
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