A poem I've gotten very good reviews out of. You'd NEVER guess the origin, though. And since I won't double post, at least SOMEONE'S got to make a QUALITY comment/critism before I'll tell! VEG



The Piper

Darkness falls, the cannons crash,
The sky is filled with their thundering flash.
A war is raging - in the middle, I'm caught.
Fighting for peace, the utmost sought.
The story I tell is strange indeed,
The story of a Piper, piping on his reed.
The music is monsterous, sweet as summer's day.
Beautiful, mindbending, and terrible in every way.
For that same music killed many a rat,
___and many a child as well.
And that same music tempted me
___into this living hell.

So now I fight unseen foes
Following the Piper, wherever he goes.
I saw that Piper long ago
A strange, black figure, he carted in tow.
I see him again, but he's not alone;
Following him are men, not of flesh and bone.
I feel the bullet hard, I fear the end is near,
And all I hear is music playing in my ear.
Goodbye, sweet life, you've been good to me,
___but now I know I'm gone.
Following forever the Piper piping
___his sweet, sad song.



- Mary-Melissa Wilzewski

I like it very much. Where did it come from and how do you get you ideas i iwsh i could write as good as you very well done. Im impressed by the detail and how it flows. If you know what i mean.

*laughs*

Honestly, the poem was originally written as a literal retelling of events from Rilla of Ingleside, the last book of the Anne of Green Gables series. Basically, one of Anne's sons wrote a poem called "The Piper", goes to fight in WWI, and dies. The poem itself was never written in the book, so I decided to do my own version.

I wrote this when I was 14. I'm amazed at what I find in it now. Sometimes I feel like I didn't really "write" it, I was just the channel from which it came. Particularly when you look at the rhythm; I'm not very good at rhythm since. LOL

Most of my best stuff I always wonder if I should take credit for; they seem to just "happen". At least I don't feel so selfish for liking them afterwards. ^-^